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put in a poem
May 19, 2007
3:55 am
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Wondered if this poem of mine might strike a chord with anyone who feels that the person they have become has been moulded by someone else.

I thought I had it

For one brief moment in time

An identity

Crafted by the person

I had searched for all my life.

And it grew.

This identity,

Under the watchful eye

Of my new creator.

It was a painful process.

Being moulded by a perfectionist

Who searched for every flaw

Of dress, of speech, of deed.

Bits were broken off me

From time to time.

To be re-moulded

Re-located

Re-invented.

And I tried so hard

To be compliant.

To fit

Into the shape he had in mind.

To become this perfect being

Making every dream come true.

But I had one fault too many

For this industrious potter.

Need.

And, once spotted,

I was dropped.

Without a backward glance

My fragile shell was discarded

Forever.

So I lie in pieces again.

Waiting for another inventor

To happen upon the fragments

And attempt to complete

What is clearly an impossible job.

To make me

Me.

May 19, 2007
12:47 pm
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(((((lovemedo)))))

What an awesome poem! Poetry helps to express what you are feeling doesn't it? Thanks for sharing it with us!

May 19, 2007
2:10 pm
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Yes, thankyou for sharing your poem.
Moulding, breaking the mould and rediscovering oneself is such a hard process.

May 19, 2007
5:38 pm
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Powerful words, lovemedo! Thank you so much for sharing them!!
I hope you don't mind that I have taken the liberty of reformatting them to make your poem a bit easier to read. If you had some other line configuration in mind, the trick is to put [br] where you want a line break, only don't use square brackets, use diamond > ones.

I thought I had it
For one brief moment in time
An identity
Crafted by the person
I had searched for all my life.

And it grew.
This identity,
Under the watchful eye
Of my new creator.

It was a painful process.
Being moulded by a perfectionist
Who searched for every flaw
Of dress, of speech, of deed.

Bits were broken off me
From time to time.
To be re-moulded
Re-located
Re-invented.

And I tried so hard
To be compliant.
To fit
Into the shape he had in mind.
To become this perfect being
Making every dream come true.

But I had one fault too many
For this industrious potter.
Need.
And, once spotted,
I was dropped.

Without a backward glance
My fragile shell was discarded
Forever.

So I lie in pieces again.
Waiting for another inventor
To happen upon the fragments
And attempt to complete
What is clearly an impossible job.

To make me

Me.

May 19, 2007
6:16 pm
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lovemedo
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Thanks Kroika.....much better.

May 19, 2007
7:08 pm
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Oh good, I'm glad you didn't mind.

And may I take this opportunity to say how much I love your nickname, being the old Beatlemaniac that I am :o)

May 19, 2007
8:31 pm
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thanks for sharing that. I can relate.

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