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Poetry Therapy Analysis
February 19, 2002
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I'd like feedback, it would be nice. Thanks:

Red Balloon

Broken children
Look for their Santa Clause
Like I look for you
A new toy saint

Look at this
Little boy smile
But it's not mine
It's not me

I don't pull your strings
I don't turn you on
But you're tethered still
My little red balloon

February 19, 2002
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Actually it's supposed to flow like this:
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Red Balloon

Broken children

Look for their Santa Clause

Like I look for you

A new toy saint

Look at this

Little boy smile

But it's not mine

It's not me

I don't pull your strings

I don't turn you on

But you're tethered still

My little red balloon

February 19, 2002
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Red Balloon
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Broken children

Look for their Santa Clause

Like I look for you

A new toy saint
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Look at this

Little boy smile

But it's not mine

It's not me
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I don't pull your strings

I don't turn you on

But you're tethered still

My little red balloon

February 19, 2002
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ok so the line spacing doesn't work here. Maybe you can still understand.

February 19, 2002
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So, correct me if I am wrong, but your not the one making your man smile? It is sad. It is way to close to many truths.

February 20, 2002
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Thanks for the feedback. No, I'm not making him smile - she is. And, though my heart just about bursts every time I'm near him, it's only me that notices. It is sad, but life can be sad just like things can make you feel ecstatic too.

Blondie, you've given me some more ideas to add - if you don't mind I use them.

J

February 20, 2002
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What I'm doing is sending him my thoughts. I sent him this poem, I'm sending him all the stuff I'm writing while I try to get over him.

I want to learn to love someone new, but I just can't seem to. I feel as though I'm performing exercism or just simply cutting him out of me with a sharp implement.

I have nothing to lose. He'll never love me again. So why not just tell him how I'm feeling? At least I get it out and hopefully it will help me move on.

February 20, 2002
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Artist, go get in touch with your wild side, you weren't ment to be singing the blues, however you do do it very well.

February 21, 2002
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Aw, geez Thanks! Mind if I let one go each day that passes? Hope your day is good! Cheers!

February 28, 2002
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Wow. Letting one balloon go each day is a really great idea! Put all of your love energy for him into it and send it to God...as you understand him/her. Even with just your imagination, I have done something like this for me and it worked to some degree.

You are 52 now and therefore you officially have your Full Deck! Another thing you could do is to give all of that love energy to yourself! Keep it for yourself! Balloons fly away or depleat, but the energy we gave them lives on! Give that energy new direction!

I have learned from my many, many losses in life that deaths are mearly new beginnings...and the end of a relationship is like a death. You have to grieve its ending. This is a chance to simplify your life and make it totally about who YOU are and without the baggage of having to consider someone else in this process. You can be totally selfish and it won't hurt anyone!

It still hurts. I recognize that. During my own recent "break up," I treated myself as I would treat my dearest most cherished friend. It all still hurt, but everything I did was something to make myself a bigger and better person. I really love me...and I am my own best company...even if someone else can't see this. I used the pain to expand my Wildwoman...I explored and created things for myself that I always wanted but never did what it took to get. I am getting them now. It still hurts...but the pain is a lot less intense. The person I had the fallout with wants to resume our friendship now...but I am not sure if I want to anymore. I am taking some time to think things over. A year and a half ago, I would have died to hear these words...but now they seem dangerous for me. I wish no malice...I just have moved on and made this a better world for myself and do not know if she will ever fit into it again. It started out as only my loss...now it is ours.

Treat yourself with utmost reverence! You deserve it.

BTW: I enjoyed meeting you the other day. You are a *most* delightful and gentle spirit. A beautiful Artist....

March 5, 2002
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I am thinking of you, Artist.... I am sending you lots of love and positive energy....

March 7, 2002
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Hello all you loves!

Well I decided to send him love emails with poetry and thoughts. I really don't care if he reads it or not. If he does, then he knows... but then again he already knows... so i have absolutely nothing to lose. If he reads these and decides not to be my friend - that's perfectly ok by me. If he still wants to be a friend - cool.

It feels good getting the feelings out!!! I'm glad they're going to the appropriate place - to him, where they belong.

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