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A Positive Poem by truthBtold.................
February 10, 2007
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and oh so long,
so long ago,
when all the world,
much larger.

I hid my heart
upon a shelf,
to languor
in it's horror.

and oh so long,
so long ago,
when all the world
so painful - - -

- - I froze my soul
inside window
to shun what felt
so remorseful.

and NOT so long,
so long ago - - -

I opened my doorway.....
to sit a spell.

I sat
and thought
and realized.......

I'd come to wrong conclusions.....
'bout myself!

And why, just yesterday.
I took a walk.

I walked - -

and jumped - -

and danced - - -

and hopped - - - -

and felt the world around me "POP"

as I NOW PARTAKE - - - -

this life

non

stop!!!!!!!

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February 10, 2007
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No one has commented on my positive poem 🙁

I thought that it was pretty good!!!!

sigh.

February 11, 2007
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truth,
I liked your poem. I just don't feel qualified to wrtie about it. It made me feel good. but that's pretty inadequate thing to say.

February 12, 2007
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Tiger Trainer,

Not inadequate at all. I am glad that it made you feel good - that's the whole point (which you already got 🙂

February 12, 2007
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it made me feel like it is possible to change and to feel positive emotions.

February 12, 2007
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Tiger,

Yes indeed. My favorite part of that poem is that which describes that I: "Came To WRONG CONCLUSIONS..... 'bout myself."

(Pretty much the bottom line, you know?)

Thanks so much for your comments Tiger.

February 12, 2007
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yes,
instead of sitting around bitting my nails about the future I did as the poem suggested and for a few minutes i saw the trees and the birds and the sky. and I realized I could jump and dance and hop.

I am not very good at analyzing things for their literary value. I read 'trashy' novels with the same zest I read classics'

I liked your poem because I could understand it and I liked how it made me feel

February 12, 2007
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TT,

Really - without nature to look out and up to......I would REALLY be a basket case.

Nature just grounds me.

The birds, the ants....hell even the little bitty spider webs in my bathroom......all bring me back to the natural rythms of life in actuality.

Actually, while we are on this subject, I'd like to share with you another poem I wrote years ago........

Nature's Door......

always open.....

teaming subtle, perpetual motion.

Do I dare......postpone my care.......cross the threshold - - - -into THIS aware???????

Beating in my pocket,
forever the key.......

turns the knob - - - -

AHHHHHHHHH..............

sweet - - -

reality.

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February 13, 2007
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Truth, nicely said 🙂 Gives hope !!

February 13, 2007
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I liked that poem. especially the end
'sweet reality'

I am going to remember that because I have tendency to forget that reality can be sweet and good.

I have to walk every day so that my medicatin will work properly. I'll remember this poem as i walk.

February 14, 2007
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Thank you all for your kind words.

Here's another one I wrote during the fall one year......I was just sitting outside, quieting my mind and heart and this poem sprang to mind:

SURRENDER

In a twinkle, in a wink - - an autumn leaf so sweetly sink,

unto the groung, where others lie - - -resting now......and prepared to die..............

For shade it gave - - - from WAY UP HIGH ----

But now, down here, moaned a welcome sigh.

I shall color this earth, from my sweet surrender - - -

and nourish this tree, when spring is tender.....

For "surrender" hath no bitter end - - -

but will, in time, secretly transcend....

down and back and up to THE SKY.....

....when all turns green, yes

bye

and

bye.

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February 16, 2007
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Wow you could analyze and think about that forever. is about death? or rebirth? is it about surrendering to problems but knowing that it is okay?
This will be a fun one to remember and think about.

February 17, 2007
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I loved your positive poem.. and read it as I also like your advice here that you've given to others. You have a way with words..NOt many people can come up with poems that express their feelings so well. Thanks for sharing.
TDM

February 18, 2007
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Thank you TT & TDM,

Your comments brought tears to my eyes.

I am in the process of getting together all of my poems for a chapbook and your words of encouragement, along with TRUSTED friends and family is finally giving me the courage to pursue putting this alogether..........

THANKS SO MUCH!!!!!!!

((((((((HUGS)))))))))

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February 21, 2007
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truth-
That poem was ...beautiful. It really touched me. Thank you for sharing. Too bad we don't know eachother personaly, I would love read your other work and maybe publish it. You have an awsome talent.
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February 21, 2007
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Your poetry certainly touches lots of people. I hope you find a way to publish it.

February 21, 2007
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Thank you all. So nice to read this wonderful feedback.

I have about 40 or so more poems just stuffed into an old briefcase which I have written over the past 10-15 years.

I had some stuff published back in high school....way back in 1978 - :-0

Anyway - it's not organized at all....just kind of runs the gamut of highs and lows and short and long.

For example, one of my shortest poems:

Feelings........friend or foe?

(don't know no 'mo!)

Another one I have relates to spring and the bulbs (like my own daffodils which are just now starting to peak out) goes like this:

ROOM TO GROW

Do not hamper upon my roots,

however small and fragile.

for these are my tiny toes and fingers.......

.....so soft and spry and agile.

Do not tamper

upon my leaves,

however supple and pristine...,

for these bits of green are but a prelude of........

......something special (yet unseen.)

Do not INFRINGE,

upon my stem,

however moiling and upreaching - - -

for to DO SO - would impinge upon...

this undaunting soul

of seedling.

Do not IMPOSE,

upon my bud.....

however vulnerable - -

and young......

....for it is like a beuatiful aria - - - -

not QUITE ready.....

to be sung.

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October 26, 2007
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tBt,

i really like your poetry. do keep trying to get them published.

^_^

October 26, 2007
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(((very interesting poem here))) I could relate, being alone, never really feeling safe in my own skin and then just venturing out and finding some good in the world but then falling down.

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